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The storm

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August 22, 2010
"This poem appeals to all the senses," says the suggester of The storm by =drop-asd, "The form adds to the depth of the work, rather than distracting from the reading."
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Suggested by KneelingGlory
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Cartilage-smooth azure extends
above bent heads.
Furrows   s t  r  e  t  c   h       b    e    y     o     

                                 the edge                               n
                                            o
                                            f

                                            e                                             d
                                            a
                                            r
                                            t
                                            h

and chime a tune about
the haggard ploughs,
about the
                           s               l
                                    
                                            e
            
                                                    e

                                                                       t
                                                                                          of sweat



and fragrance of blue-stone,
an elegy for carcasses
of worms and
beetles and
grasshoppers.

“Look what smoke is coming from the east! Dear God, please, spare us this once!”

East pulls the bellows and its vast neck s
                                                                  l
                                                                    i
                                                                      d
                                                                         e
                                                                             s

                                                                                in   d u s t.

A yawning wave of filth
unfolds beneath
the stiffening horizons.

It hesitates.

It ponders.

It tastes the windy sunset with a flick
of sixty tongues and
bathes it in saliva.

It murmurs satiated, its waistline swells
and dust,
dust sifted through its fingers,
cocoons the salty sky.

“Kids, run for the car, leave those unfinished!
Last month’s repeating, God, last month’s repeating…”

The soil pops breaths of ripe cucumbers stitched beneath incisors.
It switches odours, while the monster
rubs its milk teeth
against a gaunt
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a bonfire from a thousand matches.
Like                                                tsunamis
children                                          claw
binding                                           the
cheated                                           running
mothers,                                         wheat.

Five hoes
still close
the open throats of furrows.

“Get in the car this second! We have to go before it’s stuck!”

We run,
and as we run a wing of silence  
                                           swooping,
                                                 oblivious,
                                                          explodes.
The shallow tide like bulbous weirs
brims with eagerness to crack.
And as we run the blood of
tones of lacerated water
starts riddling

‘   ‘   ‘ ‘  ‘ ‘    ‘ ‘   ‘ ‘
   ‘ ‘ ‘     ‘ ‘ ‘ ‘ ‘’     ‘ ‘   ‘  
‘          ‘  ‘ ‘           ‘ ‘   ‘  
earth’s tapestry of bindweed.

And our hearts don’t let us turn and see
hush,
stubborn, starving and familiar,
gulp down the uncollected harvest.
EDIT:

Wow, wow, wow!!! I cannot believe this! Thank you soooo much, Lili, for suggesting this poem. No, not for suggesting it - for being such a tremendous support, for being so appreciative, for simply being constantly there. :icongwompplz: You cannot begin to imagine how happy this makes me, it's such a rare, rare happiness for a writer to get such a personal piece of writing featured. :excited: :iconeeeeeplz:. And my deepest gratitude to Jay as well for assessing this piece highly enough to feature. You are simply awesome! And also humblest thanks for all the help and assistance you've given me. :tighthug:
Oh my, I still cannot believe this even though I knew it was suggested. I didn't think it would be good enough to show to the community but I am so grateful for having the chance to share my feelings and visions with more people. :love:


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A submission for the "Cloud" contest of *DailyLitDeviations

Huge apologies to Rebecca for being such a slacker with the collaboration, but I really had to get this poem off my chest. It's been draining my inspiration for months now.

The initial idea comes from an afternoon when my family and I were collecting potatoes and then it suddenly went dark and stormy and started to pour. This summer there were torrential rains in Bulgaria, which devastated a large part of the crops.
This poem attempts to express some of the frustration farmers feel when nature itself destroys the fruits of the hard work. And hard it is, i can tell you.
It also began as a challenge, I wanted to see if I can paint a realistic rain scene without using the words "rain", "cloud", "field", and at the same time achieving a symphonic effect. Please tell me if I've succeeded or not.
This poem is very close to me but I don't feel it is finished so any critique and feedback is welcomed.
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DeathOfATragedy's avatar
I like the form and the post-apocalyptic imagery of this poem. :)