Cartilage-smooth azure extends above bent heads. Furrows s t r e t c h b e y o
the edge n o f
e d a r t h
and chime a tune about the haggard ploughs, about the s l
e
e
t of sweat
and fragrance of blue-stone, an elegy for carcasses of worms and beetles and grasshoppers.
Look what smoke is coming from the east! Dear God, please, spare us this once!
East pulls the bellows and its vast neck s l i d e s
in d u s t.
A yawning wave of filth unfolds beneath the stiffening horizons.
It hesitates.
It ponders.
It tastes the windy sunset with a flick of sixty tongues and bathes it in saliva.
It murmurs satiated, its waistline swells and dust, dust sifted through its fingers, cocoons the salty sky.
Kids, run for the car, leave those unfinished! Last months repeating, God, last months repeating
The soil pops breaths of ripe cucumbers stitched beneath incisors. It switches odours, while the monster rubs its milk teeth against a gaunt e l e c t r i c
p o s t
a bonfire from a thousand matches. Like tsunamis children claw binding the cheated running mothers, wheat.
Five hoes still close the open throats of furrows.
Get in the car this second! We have to go before its stuck!
We run, and as we run a wing of silence swooping, oblivious, explodes. The shallow tide like bulbous weirs brims with eagerness to crack. And as we run the blood of tones of lacerated water starts riddling
Wow, wow, wow!!! I cannot believe this! Thank you soooo much, Lili, for suggesting this poem. No, not for suggesting it - for being such a tremendous support, for being so appreciative, for simply being constantly there. You cannot begin to imagine how happy this makes me, it's such a rare, rare happiness for a writer to get such a personal piece of writing featured. . And my deepest gratitude to Jay as well for assessing this piece highly enough to feature. You are simply awesome! And also humblest thanks for all the help and assistance you've given me. Oh my, I still cannot believe this even though I knew it was suggested. I didn't think it would be good enough to show to the community but I am so grateful for having the chance to share my feelings and visions with more people.
Huge apologies to Rebecca for being such a slacker with the collaboration, but I really had to get this poem off my chest. It's been draining my inspiration for months now.
The initial idea comes from an afternoon when my family and I were collecting potatoes and then it suddenly went dark and stormy and started to pour. This summer there were torrential rains in Bulgaria, which devastated a large part of the crops. This poem attempts to express some of the frustration farmers feel when nature itself destroys the fruits of the hard work. And hard it is, i can tell you. It also began as a challenge, I wanted to see if I can paint a realistic rain scene without using the words "rain", "cloud", "field", and at the same time achieving a symphonic effect. Please tell me if I've succeeded or not. This poem is very close to me but I don't feel it is finished so any critique and feedback is welcomed.
Daily Deviation
Given 2010-08-22
"This poem appeals to all the senses," says the suggester of The storm by =drop-asd, "The form adds to the depth of the work, rather than distracting from the reading." (
Suggested by !KneelingGlory and Featured by
`Memnalar)
I read the poem once through, and thought the world was ending. Then I read the author's comments, and reread the poem a second time and understood the rainstorm much clearer. I guess it was more dramatic before I read the comments!
I can't even imagine how it must feel to loose a harvest. This was written back in 2009. I hope 2010 held a better outcome for you.
Haha, sorry for the disappointing last impression. At least I captured that apocalyptic mood Thank you so much for taking the time to read it.
Well, it'd be almost as if one of your parents lost their job, it could bring a lot of scandals, too. And unfortunately this year's even worse than before. The climate has really started shifting.
I can't even imagine how it must feel to loose a harvest. This was written back in 2009. I hope 2010 held a better outcome for you.
Well, it'd be almost as if one of your parents lost their job, it could bring a lot of scandals, too. And unfortunately this year's even worse than before. The climate has really started shifting.